But Alex’s professor doesn’t like it. She underlines the first two sentences, and she writes, “This is just too general. Arrive at the true point.” She underlines the 3rd and sentences that are fourth and she writes, “You’re just restating the question I asked. What’s your point?” She underlines the final sentence, after which writes into the margin, “What’s your thesis?” because the very last sentence into the paragraph only lists topics. It does not make a disagreement.
Is Alex’s professor just a grouch? Well, no—she is wanting to teach this student that college writing isn’t about following a formula (the five-paragraph model), it is about making a disagreement. Her first sentence is general, just how she learned a essay that is five-paragraph start. But through the professor’s perspective, it is much too general—so general, in reality, she didn’t ask students to define civil war that it’s completely outside of the assignment. Read More